27 Sep 2012

Five Sentence Fiction: Devotion

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So, is it going to be possible to carry on after Awkward & Zombie?


‘Sorry about that, I had something caught in my throat, ahem, wow, that’s better’ she said as she smiled up at him somewhat innocently.

‘So…you say you’re the artist? Where did you get your inspiration for this..erm..piece?’ she said as she waved her hand nonchalantly at the painting.

He snarled at her, he actually snarled at her, his lip curled up in one corner and he had a look of disdain plastered an inch thick all over his face, she knew he thought very little of her already but she was determined to salvage something of the evening and she was devoted to at least seeing it through to the bitter end.

‘the women in my life inspire me, and the everyday situations that we find ourselves in’ he practically spat at her.

‘I’m surprised you had enough for the one painting!’ she sneered back.

35 comments:

  1. I guess that is the end of a beautiful relationship then! hehehe

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    1. Oh, I don't know - nothing like a bit of friction to make things interesting!

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  2. Hmm...the tortured artist attempting to inflict some torture? You paint a vivid picture of the scruffy, bohemian type whose work she couldn't possibly hope to understand let alone appreciate. Kudos for her that she gives as good as she gets. I agree the comeuppance might just bring out the true man inside of him. Very powerful potential in such compact dimensions,

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    1. Hello, thank you for stopping by! I appreciate your comment and I have high hopes for them yet :) What can I say? I'm a romantic.

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    2. I agree with Jeffrey's comment completely. Not difficult to picture these two characters given your great description. Well done.

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  3. That's a great follow up :D eheheh.... at least he has to like her honesty xD
    Hugs,

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  4. Erm... devoted? :-D nice piece, astutely crafted...

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    1. Yes, devoted to seeing the date through! lol - tenuous link, but its there all the same :D

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  5. Ha ha! Touché...they're going to have some interesting sparring matches!

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  6. Great transaction transpiring between these two, you make it seem so real that we could be standing there observing. I loved her comeback, it was perfect!

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    1. Hi josie, thanks for stopping by :) in my head I am there and I'm glad for the company :)

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  7. Dastardly daring duel....loved it. LOL!

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    1. haha! i was turning up the heat for episode 4 - now it all depends on Lillie's prompt next week! I love a mystery :)

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  8. Whoa! great put down. Nice one Kate, made me grin.

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  9. That bitter end came rather quickly.

    Good luck next week. You might have painted yourself into a corner.

    Of course, the prompt might be "breakup."

    Cheers!
    JzB

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  10. Well, she saw the date through, didn't she?! Interesting take on the prompt.

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  11. don't think there is much to be salvaged of this nite! he one-upped her and I am glad....she behaved badly

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    1. I've been intrigued by the different perceptions if this scene. Yours is the only one do far from the 'Artists' viewpoint which has definitely made me think. Thanks.

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  12. Well, I think this is the beginning of a beautiful love story! Nothing like a good sparring :) Hope we get more of this!!!

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    1. :) quite possibly! Thanks for stopping by Lillie.

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  13. Prickly fellow. This interaction ought to get the creative juices going, as well as her. Temperamental artists. Sheesh! Love to see where this goes. Loved the verbal sparring.

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    1. Thanks, I'm intrigued to see if they will survive the next prompt.

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  15. The story continues. I can feel the air sizzle!! I love it - wonderful!

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    1. Thanks, only one more day and who knows what will happen !

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  16. I'm old enough to envision the brilliant Hepburn and Tracy acting this one out. Love the sharp ending!

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    1. That would be cool! Thank you for taking the time to stop by.

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