26 Sep 2012

Write for Ten: Police Station [Setting]


I cam across the write for ten challenge whilst reading Lillie McFerrin's blog post where she interviewed Donna B McNicol who hosts Wrote for Ten.

This is what my brain produced - all unedited and who knows where it came from.

Prompt: Police Station

9.26am Start

It was cold in the station, white walls with dirty dents and abandoned blutack and drawing pins. A shiver ran up her spine as she stepped forward into the reception area. The place was a flurry of excitement, officers walking here there and everywhere like extras in a movie, constantly passing her by. She felt invisible, no-one seemed to see her, and she shivered again. Phones were ringing, and people were shouting across the room to one another, she could here sirens as cars left the station car park, just outside the door.

She felt dizzy from all the bustling police officers in their crisp white shirts and could feel the bile rising in her throat, she swallowed and kept the remains of the evening meal down. She needed to speak, to simply open her mouth and say something, she was struck dumb. It wasn’t fear, she had nothing to be afraid of, she was a survivor at all costs but still the words were struggling to come to her.

Her muteness had spread to her ears as she heard nothing but silence, she glanced up again and was met with 20 pairs of eyes all focussed on her, it was at this moment when she had the attention that she had walked in there craving that she dropped the bloody machete.

End: 9.36am

10 comments:

  1. Interesting, and very well written. And just a little bit worrying.

    A really great experiment though!

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  2. A nice sense of setting invoked here. Good stuff. Write 4 ten is great for pushing your internal editor aside for a few minutes!

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    1. I'm not entirely sure that I have one, Eek! I need one though so...pondering on that for a while.

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  3. ohhhh so cool.... Love it (as usual eheheh)
    I'll be thinking now why she had the machete :D Did she found someone dead? Did she killed someone? Was it in self-defense? Was it just because she wanted? Or did she simply found it in the floor and went to give it to the cops.... Now you know what will be on my mind for the rest of the day :)

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    1. If its any consolation, I also have all those questions?!

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  4. Good job, Kate. Glad you stopped in at Write 4 Ten and gave it a try. It surprising what can pop our of our brains when we just 'write". Come back anytime!

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    1. Hi Donna, thanks for taking the time to stop by, I was surprised and may try again as I have agreed to do Nanowrimo and I think this will be good practice. Thank you.

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  5. Cool. I did something similar yesterday, trying to write and record a song in ten minutes. I like how it doesn't really give you a chance to be too finickity. Another great last sentence!

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    1. I imagine its much harder! I will be checking out all your new posts next.

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