4 Oct 2012

Five Sentence Fiction: Coincidence

So a quick scan of past prompts for Five Sentence Fiction has me choosing 'Coincidence' to continue the mini rom-com date.

He looked at her directly in the eyes and she glared back.

It was at that moment that she saw the corners of his mouth start to curl up, his eyes twinkled as his shoulders began to shake, as his whole face lit up he let out the cutest of laughs from that mouth.

How could she not smile back at him, as annoyed as she was at herself for it, she laughed and shook her head in disbelief at the situation.

'So...' she said, unsure as to what they were now laughing at.

He smiled, brushed the errant strand of hair from her eyes and said 'You passed.'

Thanks for reading!

12 comments:

  1. Aah, one for the romantics, nicely done.

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    1. Its the end of an era...or a month, or whatever?! lol Thanks for your comments.

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  2. Love the twist on this story.... I was expecting everything but this reaction from him... and that it was all a test.... Awesome :D

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    1. Thanks again, I thought I would finish on a high not (the hopeless romantic that I am) and make room for next weeks FSF and something new.

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  3. I think you set yourself an impossible task in attempting to tie the weekly prompts together.

    Good try though. I guess you passed.

    Cheers!

    JzB

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    1. Ha! Well, thanks I guess?! lol! I didn't spell it out in this one so I am relying on the reader a lot. I appreciate you taking the time to comment.

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  4. I like this one too! (I commented on your other one, but my OpenId isn't working correctly so I don't think it registered my name or anything ha). But good job on both, anyway

    -Brian

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    1. Hi Brian, it didnt and you are now commenting under the pseudonym of 'openid' lol! Thank you for taking the time to stop by and comment and I am glad you liked it.

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  5. A test! She accepted this information much better than I might have! :)

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    1. lol! I wanted to end the tale but if it had continued it might have made more sense as to why. Thanks for your comment.

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  6. I'm really enjoying this little mini story. Looking forward to more installments!

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    1. Hi Wayne, I am glad that you enjoyed it but it has finished now! I have a 12-part story also on here although it is currently only up to part 9. Thank you for stopping by & taking time to comment.

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