10 Dec 2012

FSF - Time

Its been a long time since I participated in Five Sentence Fiction (see sidebar) but today is the day. The prompt is Time...

With each tick of the clock she grew more anxious and her composure threatened to falter. It had been almost 24 hours since her daughter had been home. The police had said they could do nothing for 24 hours and she had sat poised on the edge of the sofa, phone in hand, ready to call the police as soon as that last second ticked by.
Her mind had been trying to imagine every possible scenario and she had built a blockade to prevent her from imagining the worst.
With 15 minutes left until she could call again, the doorbell rang, she smiled and breathed a sigh of relief as she rushed to the door and flung it open already mentally preparing the lecture she would give her daughter, what she never expected was to see two police officers standing there.

10 comments:

  1. A mother's anxieties and worst fears coming true. Nicely done.

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  2. I have never seen the idea of telling a story in just 5 sentences...interesting!

    Well done!

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    1. I'm not sure if that's good or bad but I am a glutton for punishment! So thanks for popping by :D

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  3. Sharply told Kate, and devastating!

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  4. Oh God! Every parent's worst nightmare. You told the tale with all the chilling tension it required. We would have loved another ending, but then it wouldn't be real, as this one is. Very, very well done. Sobering!

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    1. Thank you Josie, I appreciate you stopping by and taking the time to comment, I am glad you liked it. I am aiming for happier fiction as we get closer to xmas!

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