21 Feb 2013

Five Sentence Fiction: Abandoned

Its been a long time since I took part in Lillie McFerrins Five Sentence Fiction but after someone tweeted about it I thought, I'll just check the prompt and see if anything comes to mind, if so then I will take part.

The prompt was: Abandoned

And here is what my brain told me to write!

Please don't leave me
I have to
You don't have to...please...
I have to
Please don't leave me



18 comments:

  1. very good illustration that sometimes less is more. You packed a lot of emotion and set the stage for endless speculation and did it all in 20 words or less. Impressive.

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    1. I'm glad you commented because you were the someone who tweeted on question! Lol thanks. I think I am liable to over complicate things sometimes. I love speculation too & I asked myself what the story around it would be. But some things are best left unsaid. Anyway...thanks :)

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  2. Wow! Terribly sad Kate. I never will understand how you can pack so much emotion into so few words.

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    1. Thanks hap. It just sorta happened. Good prompts that caused an emotional reaction...or something like that!

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  3. Sounds as if one lover is pleading with their lover not to leave, for they're sorry for what has happened in their relationship

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    1. It does...I have thought about what type of scene this could relate to and there are so many things that it could be. Thanks for stopping by and leaving a comment.

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  4. First time I've seen one this short - nicely done!

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  5. Succinct and yet powerful, well done.

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    1. Thanks :) I appreciate all comments.

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  6. You captured the entire feeling here. Poetic.

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  7. So much emotion packed into so few words... we can conjure a dozen scenarios in our heads where this dialog would fit perfectly, and say all that there is to say. Simply excellent!

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    1. Thank you, it definitely made me ponder.

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  8. Yep, you've expertly captured desperation and loss, lovely!

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    1. haha! I love that you ended the comment with lovely, made me laugh. Thank you for your comments.

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  9. Sorry to repeat the above but yes, so much emotion and desperation in so few words. Very clever writing proving less is indeed more. x

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    1. No need to apologise! Thank you and thanks for stopping by to read it.

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